Benicia Love Poem: Breathing Lesson
Each day Benicia Patch will publish submissions to the annual Benicia Love Poem Contest. Readers are encouraged to comment on the poems.
BREATHING LESSON by Alice Knight
They sit huddled together each Thursday,
four old men in a booth at McCafe,
their voices rising, falling, as they replay
a baseball game in, let’s see,
that would have been 1982-’83.
Any woman sipping mocha in the next booth,
would believe the accuracy of their remembering
to be unquestionable, know, also,
that two or three of them will forget
to pick up milk on the way home, but one
may detour to buy See’s chocolates
for a wife who will
stand in her hallway,
dimpling at the ceiling, momentarily
smoothing the creases around her mouth
while making a mental shopping list
and thinking how much time she wasted
trying to fix him.
Bobby Richardson
10:52 am on Wednesday, January 11, 2012
This is true Alice Knight and I think, an unfortunate reality in man/woman relationships. To quote Randy Travis in his hit song, "I'M GONNA LOVE YOU FOREVER"(google it). And the lyric goes, "I'm gonna love you forever...forever and ever amen...as sure as old men sit and talk about the weather...as sure as old women sit and talk about old men...." But we all know that where there is a flower there is the sun and the rain!!!
Thanks for being REAL ALICE!!!
jady montgomery
1:23 pm on Friday, January 13, 2012
I love this poem -- the sweetness of recognition and especially the last line! and the subtle rhyming of it. There are layers and layers it evokes for me. t/u!